Studio8 - Uniting the Arts

At a quick glance my initial knee jerk reaction was, Ohhhhh Christ have mercy, not another ode to a loved one packed full of personal nostalgia that no one really truly cares about except the author. However, this one is different. Sure in terms of writing there are a few cheesy spots, but cheesy ...

Red velvet,
or was it black velvet,
under a moonlit night
the stars danced
like kisses.
My soul, my soul,
my broken heart
bleeds.
I remember now.
It was black velvet,
red blood and
something about ashes,
fire and destruction.
Screams of pain,
torment,
and promises.
And don't forget
to remember ...

Hello all,

Edog:

this sounds like an awfully good case for atheism to me.

What in organized religion isn't a good case for atheism? Shit, sitting through a long ass Catholic ceremony is reason enough for atheism..lol...actually religion baffles the hell out of me. In one hand religious ...

The London terrorists are making it more and more unlikely that Islam will retain its good name. A pity... a fucking pity.

Well its no more fair to blame Islam on terrorism than it is to blame Christianity on the war in Iraq. I doubt both terrorist attacks or imperialistic war mongering has much ...

Hi Kurt,

Wonderful poem, I really enjoyed this one. I thought the word choice was excellent. I thought the flow and tempo captured the mood of the gentle precision of meditation. However, I thought you snapped the reader out of their trance with the expository ending.

Visions of urban retreat ...

Hi Geoff,

Don't have much time right now, I sent you a PM though....Vast improvement over your other work....even in just the spelling (though still a few too many typos but nonetheless nice work on improving that)...I thought you also did a much better job with the grammar and the format -- I ...

Welcome back wild children of the mountains :x --- (supposed to be a mountain man face, yet oddly enough, looks more like a person who is doing battle with some problematic bum blockage)

Not a bad little recording LR, would have preffered it solo, found the keyboards a little distracting in places ...

I'm not going to comment on this political thread, too late at night to get angry and go on a rant...however, Stilltrucking : "Every time I see a pregnant woman I think there goes another optimist. " ---- Great line man!

Hi Geoff,

First off, though still some problematic typos, looks like you took a little extra time to clean up the spelling, or at least it seems noticeably better, well done and thanks, makes for a much easier read....now if we can only get you to focus on your grammar as well...lol ;)

"I a have ...

Hi Joel,

One of the benefits and risks I enjoy finding in shorter poetic forms is that a lot more gets left to the reader.

So do I, but only if its well done...otherwise it comes off as nothing. It's tricky stuff in my opinion and can just as easily explode in a writer's face. You really have to ...

Hi Geoff,

"Did you really read the whole thing?"

No I'm lying through my teeth.... I decided to print it all out and throw a dart to randomly pick out which one to critique. :roll: Sarcasm, isn't it grand?...lol...jk...Like I said in my comments, there are interesting snippets throughout the ...

Well thanks for nutt'n people, you were about as helpful as a parka in hell lol

My guess is it was a death threat, but then Mousey realized that I'm invinvible and retracted her claim of feeding me to pen of well trained - killer zebra mussels.

Movie by movie in my opinion by a semi-cinophile,

1. The Godfather (1972) --- one of the all time greats, though I think may critics have fallen back on this as the status quo answer. It is great, belongs in my top ten, though like all in the top ten, I'm not sure where and perhaps like the world ...

Hi Joel and welcome, pleasure to meet you.

I really liked your brave word choices and frugality. And I like when I read something that challenges me to re-read it several times before both forming an opinion, and making a reader's choice of what the piece may be about.

The first poem I percieved ...

Hiya Hester,

I have to agree with Joel and say it did start out wobbley, though not the very beginning, I thought the first four lines were well thought out and intriguing,

"Limp spines
wobble,
like springless
stems,"

However, this next section is really cliched and slapped together:

"in ...