this is a fine poem and has all the qualities...

[constantine]

this is a fine poem and has all the qualities that a 25 line poem should possess

based on past experience
it'll take around three months
for me to hate your guts
your neurosis will grind into mine
like a b-girl's hips
only without the stimulation
or the tawdry pleasure of her company
with her at least avarice overrides
the emotional - the psychological
it's purely a matter of give and take
economically speaking -
a deal on the up and up
but I wax abstract, so
for those who prefer
thecleartheconcisetheconcrete
I offer the following:
get bent
this is my poem
this is what I'm compelled to say
-- what's he trying to say?
-- he's got absolutely nothing to say!
this is my neurosis grinding into yours
it's always been that way
just because I invite you into my house
doesn't mean I want you to move in.
I drink my coffee black.

[constantine]

this was inspired by a proclamation on a bar of chinese soap. "this soap possesses..."

[Doreen Peri]

touche.

Remind me never to piss you off.

fine writing here!

[constantine]

doreen, this isn't directed at anyone in particular except perhaps english professors i've had , and critiques that pissed me off. L-Rod, don't take this as a personal deal (as it is reminiscent of an earlier comment of mine on your poem)- hell man, i don't know you well enough to hate you! the chinese soap wrapper lingo just blew my mind. i posted it on pib after an ongoing debate on critiquing - to rile em up!

[Doreen Peri]

I didn't think it was directed at anyone in particular here, dino.

Good writing... I repeat! I've written what I think are some of my most powerful pieces when I was pissed off. Just sayin'.... there's something about being riled up that works in poetry and this piece works. Sometimes it takes an English professor, a chinese soap wrapper, a debate on critiquing... whatever it takes... to inspire good poetry. And this is good poetry.

[stilltrucking]

ten four
schools out
must be my disease
that gives me unease
cause I never have anything to say either
but it never stops me from saying so anyway

nice work

[constantine]

don't put it past me doreen - i'm a double agent provocateur! what's up truck!

[stilltrucking]

beats me constantine
truly does

[Lightning Rod]

aptly provocative constantine
from past experience
it will take me three months to love a guy like you

[Terri]

Lrod--was that some kind of a subtle threat? That emoticon with the quivering upper lip makes me nervous.

[constantine]

we're all palsy- walsy! terri stop provoking these good people. haven't you done enough!! no?

[stilltrucking]

jesus h christ
what's the word coming to
L Rod never uses emoticons

My most favoirte subtle threat I have ever read on studio eight came from a college professor to L Rod
"shut up or I will shut you up"

don't get much more sublte than that

poetry beats the hell out of me
black and blue
and red all over.

[constantine]

she can't prove i didn't buy the milk there!

[stilltrucking]

Bennie was your typical shrewd Jewish businessman.
The guy would walk out of the store scratching his head
Do you still live in Mobtown?

[constantine]

no, i live in dayton ohwhyoh. moving to cincinnati to complete my studies. ancient history and art history major. after i'm done, i'll come back to balto. i miss it a lot. my family and friends . will be reading there on 4/18 at north and charles at loads of fun - doreen, wireman, and the exquisite terri will be there too. you ever go back?