River of Souls -- different version

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River of Souls -- different version

Post by Lightning Rod » January 3rd, 2010, 11:13 pm

Here is the second draft of River of Souls
it still isn't finished yet but this is where it is so far

River of Souls

This version is executed by Lrod and Robert Shelton
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by judih » January 3rd, 2010, 11:40 pm

very haunting voice, l-rod
some of the guitar reminds me of a moody blues kind of twang
some of it is late 60s-ish blues rock

i like it

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Re: River of Souls -- different version

Post by Michael » February 8th, 2011, 5:10 pm

LR, good music, for sure. I had some trouble understanding the lyrics. I’m sure that being aurally challenged doesn’t help.

I did hear the instruments and the voice. Consequently, I heard the Moody Blues, which j. referenced.

I also heard Neil Young, albeit he would have made the lyrics even more difficult to understand. Your range seems to be similar to his.

Songs played and sung in minor keys are, indeed, haunting. Add to that the idea of a “river of souls” and this piece is a supersized haunt.

The music’s good, as I stated, but I’d like to be able to read the lyrics while the song’s playing.

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Re: River of Souls -- different version

Post by Hollweg » February 10th, 2011, 1:32 pm

Down By The River

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A river of souls
courses around us each day,
tugging and tugging.

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Re: River of Souls -- different version

Post by creativesoul » February 11th, 2011, 6:31 pm

i like the title, and i want more- but i am a bit deaf, can you sign? lol
love your work!
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