BOY’S DOG ON THE ROAD

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jim turner
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BOY’S DOG ON THE ROAD

Post by jim turner » December 11th, 2010, 6:25 pm

Not his death but the way of it
haunted the day.
It sat up and begged,
forepaws–for answers--
scratching unanswered doors.

Cars don’t share the road with dogs,
and the dogs have not been told.
Tires, like trees, are there
for cocked legs,
not for sudden death.

Given forever,
they could never fix a flat,

nor I, wagging my ignorant tail
across a dangerous world,
put back the pieces
of a dog’s boy’s heart.

Jim 12/13/09

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Re: BOY’S DOG ON THE ROAD

Post by libramoon » December 11th, 2010, 6:37 pm

Jim, this is so affecting. It breaks my heart, and yet gives a kind of hope in the very grieving. One glitch on the way to perfection to my mind:

"of a dog’s boy’s heart."

Wouldn't "of a boy's heart." be more effective?

Peace,
Laurie

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Re: BOY’S DOG ON THE ROAD

Post by jim turner » December 11th, 2010, 6:47 pm

Sure, unless you read that the boy's heart belonged to the dog. Thank you for reading and responding so quickly. jim

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Post by tarbaby » December 12th, 2010, 7:26 am

Breaks my heart
Thanks for the poem it puts words to what I have felt about dogs gone by.

Letting go, I suppose that is what kids learn from loving dogs. The first mourning experience for many of us. If we are fortunate sons.
“Where is that man who has forgotten words that I may have a word with him?”

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Post by dadio » December 12th, 2010, 5:13 pm

One of your best, Jim. Strong poem with that mature sentiment.

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Post by happytrails » December 13th, 2010, 9:45 am

Dogs boy. It is the truth of all pet [owners]. We are as much theirs as they are ours. Especially dogs. In the case of cats we are more theirs than they are ours. But that's okay with me. I learned to live with it at a very early age. The dog was mine, I was the cats.

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Post by weepingwillow » December 15th, 2010, 1:47 am

Very moving.

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Post by Sue Littleton » December 16th, 2010, 12:49 pm

Congrats, Jim. This is one of those "Awww!" poems. I am now a cat person now (too lazy to walk a dog), and this really touched me. I found my Sheltie Pablo Neruda a great home before I moved back to Buenos Aires, and I still miss him. There is nothing as moving as a dog pricking his ears, lolling his tongue, and looking at you with love.

I will stick to cats, though. Sue♥♥

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