Dawns Song

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revolutionR
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Re: Dawn Awakens

Post by revolutionR » April 23rd, 2015, 3:18 pm

nice one. 8)

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Re: Dawn Awakens

Post by WIREMAN » April 23rd, 2015, 6:04 pm

like the imagery and space within the words....
me I feel like I'm becoming some kinda Kung fu t.v. Priest.....

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Re: Dawn Awakens

Post by Tjflowers80 » April 24th, 2015, 1:45 am

I love the last two lines. Very beautiful imagery. Very beautiful poem. Thanks!
And above me the stars align
But not yet with my own
And the night birds sing
Whilst the demon haunts this restless soul.

Jessica Taylor

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Re: Dawn Awakens

Post by saw » April 25th, 2015, 7:17 am

there is a lot of talking going on in the woods, even the flowers and weeds have voices...that's why I feel so alive after a hike....like I tapped into the universal heartbeat
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: Dawns Song

Post by Tjflowers80 » April 25th, 2015, 11:03 am

Saw I know how you feel? I may a woman but I am no primpy one at that! Your comment is true in every way.
And above me the stars align
But not yet with my own
And the night birds sing
Whilst the demon haunts this restless soul.

Jessica Taylor

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Re: Dawns Song

Post by Atehequa » April 25th, 2015, 7:04 pm

Received and felt in a good way.

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Re: Dawns Song

Post by fuchsiafestival! » April 26th, 2015, 11:48 pm

Some of the images in this are pretty good. I like the idea of stars being restless. Punchy piece.

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