judie's haiku after no more tear

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Post by judih » June 29th, 2005, 1:06 pm

laughter paints reverie
once upon a time
wishes come true

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Post by jimboloco » June 29th, 2005, 1:23 pm

there once was a man from nantucket
who thought about saying "chuck it!"
he turned his big frown all the way upsidedown
and smiled his way down to pawtucket
[color=darkcyan]i'm on a survival mission
yo ho ho an a bottle of rum om[/color]

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Post by judih » June 30th, 2005, 11:09 pm

judie s writes:


i
stand stare
disillusioned disbelieving
missing cursing
you

i want to thank you all for your insights, especially judih for putting my words out there for yours (and for her hugs).

may there always be more glee in our lives than sorrow.... judie

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Post by stilltrucking » July 1st, 2005, 8:46 am

Sorry to here about your loss, I hope there is one child left to carry on.

Macho

April Funeral
Rainy day
brings black tears

paper yarmulke
we were all young American jews
not religious

the worst kind of jew
assimilated
Israel just another government

Hebrew National cemetry
Next door to a slaughter house
Rabbi speaks, hogs scream


this is just a first draft, I know it ain't right but it is pretty much exactly as if they wrote themselves Would be interested in hearing what is wrong about them,
I kind of like them so it don't matter. Just let me know what ya'll think.

thanks

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Post by joel » July 1st, 2005, 10:48 am

black-eyed susan field
nevermind petals laced by nature's hunger
20/20 vision upward



that's what I think. -joel
"Every genuinely religious person is a heretic, and therefore a revolutionary" -- GBShaw

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Post by stilltrucking » July 1st, 2005, 12:08 pm

just vanity on my part i came back to try and edit before anyone saw it. Funerals for fuel

pushing up daises
kosher fertilizer
hind sight 20 20

after death
no suffering
dust to dust

thanks Joel

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Post by joel » July 1st, 2005, 2:03 pm

orogenic megalith
inanimate professes each moment
former dust’s potential



I just learned today about the edit option. Wow. That's a handy bugger I wish were everywhere in everyday life....
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Post by jimboloco » July 2nd, 2005, 1:02 am

love and peace
not a dream
breathing bell

We can all grieve together
and affirm
the love that will go on
through others
as we become
the ancestors,
waiting to be healed.
[color=darkcyan]i'm on a survival mission
yo ho ho an a bottle of rum om[/color]

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Post by judih » July 2nd, 2005, 3:16 am

i am ancestor
receiver of faults and riches
i nurture the seed

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Post by Artguy » July 2nd, 2005, 10:03 am

deaths' feared mystery
contains unkown sorrow
wilting flower

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Post by jimboloco » July 2nd, 2005, 12:17 pm

I wanted to say goodbye
I saw him from the hallway
He was going home at last with hospice, to stay
at last, defeated by the malignant melanoma,
large white rectangular scoops, in white,
on his head, bald as well, a cubist Buddha,
mas para venir.....tengo que fumar mota loco con mi sobrino.
un sabado facil.

iIwent in about 4 pm, said general greetings,
like, "hope you' re gonna do well at home," he smiled and nodded, it was cool, next scene later on, him surrounded by family, a tall young kid looks like him, long brown hair,

The guy spent a year at DaNang, got sprayed, hey not directly, but the so-called "ranch hands" c-132 cargo planes fitted with these spraying apparatus, wow, the spray drifted on the winds, hovered over vast empty spaces, softly raining down ...

Told him stuff, too, general bullshit, he was a lifer, 9 years enlisted, then got commissioned, had to get a bachelopr's degree,, cool, retyired as a major after 23 years. he's registered with the agent orange survey, but no matter, too late for him, unnless therer are some survivors' bennies.

orgullo=proud

the war drags on
recurring in his dreams
great orange mushroom cloud

nightmared dreaming bleeding men
lookouts tremmbing at the shore
no man can find the war
[color=darkcyan]i'm on a survival mission
yo ho ho an a bottle of rum om[/color]

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