Tiny Dancer

[68degrees]

Woman with tears.
Woman with chapped seams.
Woman of scarlet lipstick.
Woman of raped dreams.

She once told me she wanted
to dance, later pranced
into her grave with music
coming from every hole
in her tired body.

[revolutionR]

Says a lot, in a few lines, good ink.

[68degrees]

Thanks.

[Grinch]

Nice poem

[68degrees]

Nice poem

Thanks.

You might get bored here

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[judih]

the music coming "from every hole in her tired body" - a powerful line. stayed with me all night.

[Grinch]

You might get bored here

That's possible but I'll stick around for a while and see how it goes, so far it looks and feels OK, less of the traditional forms of poetry that I prefer but I can live with that. Nice poems are nice poems whatever flavour.

[saw]

much complexity with much economy...a trick I never mastered.....just call me Mr. Bombastic

[68degrees]

the music coming "from every hole in her tired body" - a powerful line. stayed with me all night.

Thanks, Judih. Older poem I've been reworking. It's getting closer.

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[68degrees]

You might get bored here

That's possible but I'll stick around for a while and see how it goes, so far it looks and feels OK, less of the traditional forms of poetry that I prefer but I can live with that. Nice poems are nice poems whatever flavour.

I agree. I was talking about the temperament of the posters. Everyone is nice here. Not much to laugh it as opposed to the grammar buffoons at AT.

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[68degrees]

much complexity with much economy...a trick I never mastered.....just call me Mr. Bombastic

Nothing wrong with different, Saw. Different is good.

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[leafsailors ghost]

This is one of those poems simply amazes me . Just opens the heart and walks right in, I have known her and my heart breaks again now reading , as I know yours must have ,this is art sir.

[68degrees]

This is one of those poems simply amazes me . Just opens the heart and walks right in, I have known her and my heart breaks again now reading , as I know yours must have ,this is art sir.

Her name was Janice. It was many years ago.

Thank you.

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