My bare unmistakeable

hester_prynne · Post by **hester_prynne** » May 4th, 2005, 5:49 pm

Crisis
in the middle
life,
fuck wars,
polite icks,
I'm stripping
off
this world,
going naked,
all the way
down to
my bare,
unmistakeable
ass,
which,
by the way,
i'm
teaching,
to
wink
at you.

Post by **izeveryboyin** » May 5th, 2005, 3:21 pm

BAM!!! Great, piece. Hint of satire, playful, intense. Loved it. You win! you win at life!

--k

hester_prynne · Post by **hester_prynne** » May 5th, 2005, 5:20 pm

glad you saw the humor, that's how it was meant.
I often worry that my humor is offensive, or too bitter sounding. It's just me though, laughing at myself....

Thanks fer readin me Iz!
H

Post by **Artguy** » May 5th, 2005, 5:57 pm

Take it all off Hes....

Post by **izeveryboyin** » May 5th, 2005, 6:24 pm

hest, I'm sure u haven't forgotten my friend john and I's "let's all sing for doreen peri" posts on litkicks. Need I say more?

--k

P.s reading it was definitely my pleasure!

Post by **mousey1** » May 8th, 2005, 4:15 pm

Priceless....absolutely priceless!!!!!!!

Wish I'd written it!

Aw, hell, I'll use it, no one need never know....shhhhhh.

You made me laugh with this one girl and it is so how I feel sometimes. You and me Hes....and Izy....could the world stand such nakedness.....and such winking!!!!!!

Post by **izeveryboyin** » May 9th, 2005, 11:03 am

if not we'll shove it down their throats, and spoonfeed them violently.

--k

Post by **mnaz** » May 9th, 2005, 3:28 pm

*** Wink ***

Post by **izeveryboyin** » May 9th, 2005, 3:36 pm

*wink*

--k

Post by **Trevor** » May 21st, 2005, 7:32 pm

down to
my bare,
unmistakeable
ass,
which,
by the way,
i'm
teaching,
to
wink
at you.

Great lines, I'm with mousey, wish I had written them. Btw, out of curiousity, noticed most of your poems have the same style of lots of line breaks. Is this intentional, as in is this how you wish the audience to read it, or is it more of habit or esthetics? Anyways, just curious is all. Thanks.

hester_prynne · Post by **hester_prynne** » May 21st, 2005, 8:20 pm

Why thank you Trevor, for reading me!

My thought is, and perhaps I think errantly, that it assists the reader to hear my flow and inflexions, tones, feelings, me.

I dunno. I write from some well in me that until recently, someone else had control of.

Suggestions are always welcome.

H

Post by **mousey1** » May 21st, 2005, 8:32 pm

Snub - a - roo!

Post by **Trevor** » May 22nd, 2005, 9:05 am

Hi Mousey,

Not really sure what you mean by snub-a-roo?

Hi Hes,

"My thought is, and perhaps I think errantly, that it assists the reader to hear my flow and inflexions, tones, feelings, me."

That was what I was kinda wondering. I find when I first read a poem, I read it with my own natural flow and tones, then as I re-read it I try to consciously make an effort to follow how I feel the author wishes me to read it....save for rhymning scheme poetry, then usually you are kinda gently forced to read it a certain way, even on the first read. Anyways thanks for the clarification.

"I dunno. I write from some well in me that until recently, someone else had control of."

Glad to hear you got back control of it. Must have sucked not being able to drink your own water.

"Suggestions are always welcome. "

Ehhh, no real suggestions here, I think its a good poem as is. Anyways, thanks again for the read, I enjoyed this piece.

Post by **mousey1** » May 22nd, 2005, 9:33 am

Hi Trev,

Twas meant as a good-natured jibe pointing to the fact that....

my comments and others re Hes's fine poem were completely ignored...

purely unintentional I know....

thus my....

"snub - a - roo" remark.

I thought it was cute.....me thinks Hes is not amused.

My apologies.

Post by **Trevor** » May 22nd, 2005, 12:24 pm

Hey Mousey,

Just checking, wasn't sure who that was directed at and since I'm a self centered man, I wanted to make sure your snub a roo had nothing to do with me, even though everything does...lol