Fractured Fairytale

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saw
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Fractured Fairytale

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the gingerbread man
was well endowed,
the witch in the woods
wanted nookie,

but how would it look
to the girls in the coven
getting caught in the act
with a cookie.
Last edited by saw on June 24th, 2008, 7:22 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Post by emel.scott »

lol a pet name for my girlfriend is cookie so I'm available to testify if it comes down to it...she's also a witch and I tell her go fuck herslf all the time :D

nice morning laugh Steve

one nit, might consider dropping a couple syllables in that 6th line, something like;
but how would it look
to the enclave girls
getting caught in the act
with a cookie.

(you might also consider coven for enclave because of the 'oven' cookie connection)
Last edited by emel.scott on June 24th, 2008, 2:35 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Post by judih »

it is a great poem, steve and i'll always fall for a fractured fairytale.

emel, any excuse to use the word 'coven' - it would work great here.
to me it's like 'haven'
a fabulous idea filled with connotations
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Post by constantine »

think emel nailed it - coven's a natural. tres amusant.
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Post by saw »

thanx scott, judih, and dino...and yes of course "coven" is the
perfect choice.....duly noted and amended.....peace........steve
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