grotesque

Post by **Odette** » July 29th, 2008, 6:24 pm

The elevator. A shiny tin can. Coffin.

I stare at feet encased in Italian leather to avoid. Everywhere house of mirrors. Bad hair. Lips ricochet off metal walls.

I miss my floor. Key it again. The elevator stops, I hold my breath. Clenched fists. Pretty cell phone impromptu brass knuckle.

A girl walks in. Bow-legged Geisha. Looks with curious dark eyes.

I look away. Confront the image of us. Wall, to wall, to wall, to wall.

Post by **mtmynd** » July 29th, 2008, 6:34 pm

welcome, odette and thank you for this most interesting introduction.

i hope you make it to your floor with no serious problems...

Post by **Odette** » July 29th, 2008, 7:28 pm

Oui, Monsieur. Tout est bien. Merci, beaucoup.

Post by **SmileGRL** » July 30th, 2008, 9:49 am

elevators can be scary/uncomfortable places (...or it can be very sexy). i enjoyed this Odette, specially "lips ricochet off metal walls" well said

Post by **Odette** » July 30th, 2008, 10:33 am

Post by **saw** » July 30th, 2008, 11:58 am

vivid images emerge in your colorful language.....cool scene....steve

Post by **Arcadia** » July 30th, 2008, 1:08 pm

I stare at feet encased in Italian leather to avoid

Confront the image of us. Wall, to wall, to wall, to wall.

I loved the details!!!!!

Post by **bennie2** » July 30th, 2008, 2:26 pm

beautifully captured moment, Odette.

i lived on the 14th floor of a tower block for 18months and never once thought of how pretty/scary/sexual/charged lifts can be.

Post by **Odette** » July 30th, 2008, 4:27 pm

Saw, merci. You have much good writing here.

Arcadia, details oui!

Bennie2, our greatest moments are in the lift. Merci.

Post by **mtmynd** » July 30th, 2008, 4:37 pm

your avatar... egon, yes?

Post by **Odette** » July 30th, 2008, 4:49 pm

Oui! Et tu, mon ami? Geiger?

Post by **mtmynd** » July 30th, 2008, 5:03 pm

no. no Geiger. my own painting, merci.

Post by **Odette** » July 30th, 2008, 9:40 pm

Droit dessus !

Post by **mtmynd** » July 30th, 2008, 10:25 pm

''Droit dessus"

translation please...

Post by **Doreen Peri** » July 30th, 2008, 10:31 pm

Literally, it means "top right" in french.

I suspect it's an idiom for top shelf or good stuff... something like that.

Of course, you didn't ask me but hey, since I was here when you asked, I figured I'd answer anyway.