you. i breathe

Post by **SmileGRL** » August 8th, 2008, 10:01 am

i bReathe the uNcut flowers grOwing in your soul. grow groW she whiSpers drEams. coMe fill my ear. i drink you tHirsty with grins gRowing roots in laUghing wrinkles kiSsed my eyes. your whiMsical heaRt is fertile ground is bEautifully siLLy jokes is sWeet warm tea nourishing my fAiry berry dreams liFting me up up uP. i aM the sUn. sunrays nO greys. just yelloW blooms filling my nose kiSsing both iLashes with petalled fiNger aFternoons. tea? 4for 2two. pOpcorn & winged cocoons. yOu pull me iN you sPin me deep stuCk in favorite cookie trees. leaves rustle my kNees. you plaNt me like an uN cut fLower. yoU. i breathe

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Post by **constantine** » August 8th, 2008, 10:09 am

great day on big rock candy mountain- excellent work!

Post by **SmileGRL** » August 8th, 2008, 10:31 am

candy mountain...haha. so clever you are. so...not blind. thanks dino. great day? yes! have one...

Post by **bennie2** » August 8th, 2008, 4:50 pm

i read this in work today, mj. inside my head i read it aloud and it has a real internal rhythm. if I had a better voice i'd record it and send it to you. i use your capitalisations as musical rests and stresses.

uncut flowers with a chance to take root
to grow
to flourish in dirt

cut flowers prepared for sale
to drink from clear waters
then die in days

Post by **goldenmyst** » August 10th, 2008, 10:11 pm

MJ, you spin cotton candy dreams into tapestries of woven beauty.

John

Post by **Perdida** » August 11th, 2008, 5:53 am

you plaNt me like an uN cut fLower. yoU. i breathe

Damn that's beautiful.

Post by **SmileGRL** » August 11th, 2008, 4:12 pm

bennie...that's perfect! and yes...

john...you always make me smile. thanks

perdida...* she curtsies* thank you kindly

Post by **sweetwater** » August 12th, 2008, 11:52 am

deconstructing mathematics
until the emotions become real

Post by **SmileGRL** » August 12th, 2008, 2:51 pm

sweetwater...emotions are always real. it's the mathematics that sometimes get in the way...

Post by **hester_prynne** » August 12th, 2008, 2:58 pm

just a delightful read, thru and thru, again and again....
H

Post by **SmileGRL** » August 12th, 2008, 3:01 pm

thank you miss hester. glad i delight, more than once

Post by **mtmynd** » August 12th, 2008, 5:49 pm

yes, Hes'... 'delight' is the perfect adjective for this piece.

very real, mj... and original as you are. keep doin' it.

Post by **Lightning Rod** » August 12th, 2008, 8:29 pm

Yes, this is a piece with great whimsey, SG.

What dino was quoting was a Woodie Guthrie tune

Here is my whimsical version of it:

Big Rock Candy Mountain

Post by **emel.scott** » August 13th, 2008, 12:52 am

Thanks Clay, listening was like a lullaby for me this evening. I'll sleep better because of it.

Scott

Post by **Lightning Rod** » August 13th, 2008, 1:04 am

emel.scott wrote:Thanks Clay, listening was like a lullaby for me this evening. I'll sleep better because of it.

Scott

thank you scott

that's one of the highest compliments I could imagine

I love to put people to sleep...haha

I used to sing this tune to my daughter as a lullaby

hats off to Woody