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My America

Post by the mingo » June 3rd, 2008, 9:43 am

once there was a girl
with double jointed wrists
she lived on a big farm
at a crossroads
her playmates were dire wolves
six foot tall at the shoulder & 10,000 years extinct
everyone told her that it
was a bad idea but she
just laughed & flapped her
double jointed wrists at them all
as she ran off towards the woods

one day the wolves stopped smiling
and surrounded her
her screams were heard for miles
and so was the silence that followed

the farm is still there
the crossroads too
the screams are long gone
and their echo
but the silence has reached
down thru the years and
can still be heard for miles
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Post by Doreen Peri » June 3rd, 2008, 12:10 pm

I really like this poem, mingomingobobingo :)

Very imaginative and an interesting fantasy-like strange dream or something.

I don't get the title, tho. Just sayin'

but hey, if you've read my replies to lots of poets lately, I don't get a lot of what things

heh

I'm seriously getting worried about myself... maybe my brain isn't making the correct connections or sumthin

but the poem was very cool! I liked it a lot!

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Post by the mingo » June 3rd, 2008, 1:28 pm

...i don't get the title either...sometimes i start with a title and run with it...but sometimes not...i wrote this & fussed with it a bit then was stuck for a title...so i went to get a refill on my coffee. just as i set the pot down a .36 caliber navy colt went off in my head and when the bullet stopped ricocheting around the inside of my skull i went over and picked it up. there was writing on the side of it but the bullet was somewhat deformed (i have a hard head,i'm told) what i finally made out of the writing said "my america" best guess anyway...i wouldn't worry 'bout your connections none...i think your brain is just busy making new connections...when thats done it will let you know...same thing happens to me from time to time...and ,as always, thx for taking the time to read & the letting me know that you did. and don't worry.
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Post by saw » June 3rd, 2008, 6:32 pm

now you would think that a pack of horny wolves would love a girl with double-jointed wrists, but her mistake was laughing when they exposed themselves....there is a moral here....
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Post by hester_prynne » June 4th, 2008, 2:01 am

Love this.
It speaks to me in volumes.
I think the gal just muzzled herselves so the wolves wouldn't find her.
At least, she muzzled herselves to wolves that wanted to eat her aliveness.
She is the one who must ever hear their well fed hungry howls.......
Indeed America......
Indeed, I sense lovely sparkles on a monkey train......
Thanks Mingo.
H 8)
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW

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Post by the mingo » June 4th, 2008, 8:45 am

thank you,hest, good mornin' hello hello hello & thanks for reading...i got a colony of cushion moss for a pet ...it looks just like a tribble...i usually leave the things in the woods alone but sometimes the game belongs to temptation right from the get go...
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Post by the mingo » June 4th, 2008, 9:02 am

hey and g'mornin' saw...usually when i end up writing something it means i lost the struggle to just keep my mouth shut...the piece looks at me and says with a grin "You lose,pal" & i just tip my hat & answer
"you're right & you'll get no argument from me"...poems always mark the places where i have lost...i guess thats the moral for me...thx for reading,saw...
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Post by WIREMAN » June 4th, 2008, 12:40 pm

this is one of those pieces that amazes me....it's original and thought provoking......DAMN!!!! i likes it......

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Post by the mingo » June 5th, 2008, 10:36 am

thanx wireman, i appreciate your saying so. sometimes a poem gets itself expressed despite the writer who's lot it becomes to get it down...thx again wm.
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Post by gypsyjoker » June 5th, 2008, 2:03 pm

Interesting
thought provoking
the thought provoked
for me is
the dire wolf is still extinct
killed off by americans but we still up to our asses in Americans

just a thought


I really have no idea what the poem meant
but I liked it.
please pardon my disturbed thoughts
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Post by emel.scott » June 5th, 2008, 2:42 pm

I'd bet the biting memory of her comes in waves...nice read
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Post by gypsyjoker » June 5th, 2008, 3:22 pm

Sorry, truly for my ramble, I would have deleted it but now I can't.

What triggered it was this

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"Were These America’s First Ecologists?"

Paul S. Martin, a spokesman for this view, says that the first Americans may have literally swept the North and South American continents clean within a span of only a thousand years, totally decimating the native fauna.2
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The Dire Wolf (Canis dirus) is an extinct carnivorous was most common in North America during the Pleistocene... Approximately 10,000 years ago, the Dire Wolf became extinct along with most other North American megafauna.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dire_wolf
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