The Princess and the Pea

[Lightning Rod]

She was the princess
I was the pea. I was
her constant irritation
her punishment for sensitivity

I was course, she was fine
I poured paint, she drew the line
through fifty mattresses she could feel me

[westcoast]

i like the succinctness of how you write Lrod. lots said here with few lines.

~westie

[Lightning Rod]

thank you westie
the essence of poetry
is brevity
and pictures painted with a single stroke

[westcoast]

i agree and wish that knowledge is appreciated.

i've been mulling around in my head a poem to a poet not understood. fictional but not

i don't want to struggle when i read POETRY

[Lightning Rod]

my feeling exactly
I don't want to do research to understand a poem
I just want the light to go on
multiple orgasms are nice
but at least give me one

[westcoast]

lol.. i'm greedy, i'll take all i can get.

yeah, good poetry delivers

~westie

[the mingo]

Lightning - I love it to death when you decide to nail something down.

westie - "...good poetry delivers" - amen to that!

[SmileGRL]

*nodding her head in agreement* yes, yes & yes! (sorry, couldn't resist!)

mr LRod...painting a clear picture. i like the simplicity of the words carrying so much on its back

[hester_prynne]

I was Rapunzel
he was the prince,
I let my hair down,
ain't seen him since.....

H

[constantine]

do you mean course or coarse - coarse seems to fit the context, but i may be missing something. solid work.

[Lightning Rod]

I was Rapunzel
he was the prince,
I let my hair down,
ain't seen him since.....

H

'till she started peeling off her onion gook
she took off her wig said, "how do i look?"
I was high flyin', bare nekked, out the window"
--Dylan