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hester_prynne
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Want home

Post by hester_prynne »

Want quiet.
Shut up mind....
Leaves fall,
hummingbirds whir,
spiders spin.

I know the score now.
Origins 3 floors below....
I made it up to second,
tookah lotta lumps,
bla bla.

Want home.
Click heels together....
Belt out a song,
success is a hoax,
and so is Romeo.
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW
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Good solid succinct set of words, hester_prynne. Some might call this a minimalist style. You make your points, though, indeed, several points.-Ron in Tasmania 8)
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Arcadia
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great view...!!!!!!! :lol: gracias, hester!!!!
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thanks again, Arcadia, for your enticing response.- Best wishes from Australia 8)
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(...of course I trust you'll see Romeo's tongue-in-cheek....)

Success – I hope – success – I hope – is not a hoax
but expectations are:
success is confidence that all emblazoned smokes
no matter where the fount of fuel has been who stokes
the coal that smolders flame, or gas that burns a star.
Success is not a hoax, but call to question those
who ask: Am I Successful? My successes char
whatever I suppose
my expectations were.
"Every genuinely religious person is a heretic, and therefore a revolutionary" -- GBShaw
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Now that was a little twister for the brain, joel. "Good...onyer," as they say in Australia-Ron 8)
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And then there's "be where your feet are". Can't be anyplace else, hey?

To friendship,
Michael
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That's a new one to me, Michael. thanks from Tasmania.-Ron :D
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life's disillusionments, surprises.....neatly wrapped up in fast forwarded language......hip and succinct in all the right ways......cool stuff, hest
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