I'm gonna

[mtmynd]

i'm gonna change myself
into a turquoise lagoon
and harbor great sailing
ships from around the world -
their hulls filled with
riches from coastal towns
caressing the shores
like small feet dipping
into a child's pool
for the very first time.

i'm gonna call myself 'nod'
and laff at reality's joke
while strumming a mandolin
made of a tree that stood
thirty paces from the sea
that lapped her roots
but left its salt to the
deer that grazed the tidepools
sprinkled across the sands
sparkling like mini-universes
in the fountains of my eyes.

i'm gonna reach for the
horsehead nebula and swing
my legs over it's torso
and go for a ride into eternity
waving my left hand thats
releasing gold and diamond
stepping stones for others
to follow without
a care in their heads
whistling roy roger songs
from the black & white tv
westerns made for whitey.

i'm gonna...
one of these days...
some day...
some way...
some how...

[saw]

great writing
imaginative in concept
well constructed in the imagery
and an overall delightful experience for this reader....

[mtmynd]

great writing
imaginative in concept
well constructed in the imagery
and an overall delightful experience for this reader....

Thank you much, amigo!

[theirishsea]

I'm thinking would this poem get into one of those academic journals? I don't know but this poem is pretty damn interesting. Your imagination led you off into a rich communication of your visions. Maybe the ending----I'm gonna----might be a question or a resolution but I think the poem accomplishes that fact. Puts some of it into the past tense---though we(readers) all hope there is more to come.

[mtmynd]

I'm thinking would this poem get into one of those academic journals? I don't know but this poem is pretty damn interesting. Your imagination led you off into a rich communication of your visions. Maybe the ending----I'm gonna----might be a question or a resolution but I think the poem accomplishes that fact. Puts some of it into the past tense---though we(readers) all hope there is more to come.

TYVM, TIS... much appreciated.

[mnaz]

My expert literary critique: Awesome. Star stuff in all its forms and excursions. Cosmic cowboy. Rope that nebula!

For some reason this poem put a coupla tunes in my head -- a hint of Steve Miller's 'The Joker', when 'nod' laffed and strummed his mandolin, and the title ... I'm gonna. I can't hear that without thinking of an old Max Romeo tune ...

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WpIAc9by5iU

Completely unrelated, of course...

[Doreen Peri]

Great work!