I Don't Belong here (senryu)

Post by **Dixie** » October 28th, 2005, 2:14 pm

It's obvious now.
Should have listened to myself
from the very start.

Post by **Doreen Peri** » October 28th, 2005, 2:41 pm

Yes you do.

(But I'm sure you're not talking about *here*, meaning right here, but yeah, you belong lotsa places.)

I've felt this way before and you stated it quite clearly ... I know this feeling. Well done!

Question... I counted the syllables and it's 5-7-5 like they teach the standard haiku.

What makes this a senryu?

I'm familiar with the term but I never really studied the format. What's the difference between haiku and senryu?

Looking forward to your answer.

Tanka very much.

Post by **mnaz** » October 29th, 2005, 4:28 am

in the studio
to riff another verse
we return

(I think senryu is haiku with a human reference.... am I right?)

Post by **Dixie** » October 29th, 2005, 8:53 am

a senryu is a 3-line unrhymed Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku but treating human nature usually in an ironic or satiric vein

thanks Doreen and mnaz

it's just funny because I don't know where I belong anymore...sigh

Post by **mtmynd** » October 29th, 2005, 10:37 am

as i'm reading this
i wonder if it is true...
belonging is life

Post by **WIREMAN** » October 29th, 2005, 11:45 am

the big dog
moans for it's
master, she
has gone to
the market.......

Post by ~K » November 1st, 2005, 9:26 am

What is obvious
is merely surface bullshit
you shoud know better

Post by **gypsyjoker** » November 1st, 2005, 10:19 am

surface bullshit
the moon in the water
is life fair
anniefay's hair