Stopping the mind (subject to footnote 4)

Post your poetry, any style.
Post Reply
User avatar
mnaz
Posts: 8093
Joined: August 15th, 2004, 10:02 pm
Location: north of south

Stopping the mind (subject to footnote 4)

Post by mnaz »

the seers liken it to the surface of a pond,
whose ripples expire upon stoppage of wind,
upon the stoppage of labyrinthine desire
that i desire.

and life was short in a cliched pop standard.
it's clear; the pond has nothing to do with time.
it sends the unending ripples, that's all.
they come, even in halcyon intervals.

lord how i've tried,
legs folded, eyes shut, palm to the sky,
bottle empty, heart numb, head to the cloud.
they come; it's no use.

i can't switch off molten tides.
i can't separate breathing from breath.
the seers stop the ripples,
and i start them again.
User avatar
Arcadia
Posts: 7964
Joined: August 22nd, 2004, 6:20 pm
Location: Rosario

Post by Arcadia »

faint sounds
fail in the empty laberynth
faddist fade
in fact

(I'm joking!). I really like your poem!
User avatar
stilltrucking
Posts: 20705
Joined: October 24th, 2004, 12:29 pm
Location: Oz or somepLace like Kansas

Post by stilltrucking »

mnaz wrote
lord how i've tried,
legs folded, eyes shut, palm to the sky,...

and life was short in a cliched pop standard.
it's clear; the pond has nothing to do with time.
it sends the unending ripples, that's all.
they come, even in halcyon intervals.



Speaking of cliched pop songs

Johnny Cash:
Unchained

... And I have been unwise
Restless from the cradle...
Have I seen an angel
Or have I seen a ghost
Where's that rock of ages
When you need it most


The closest I can get to timelessness these days is a walking meditation.

I enjoyed reading your poem
More than enjoyed it
It was helpful
thank you
mtmynd
Posts: 7752
Joined: August 15th, 2004, 8:54 pm
Location: El Paso

Post by mtmynd »

cannot stop mind
can stop attachment
User avatar
mnaz
Posts: 8093
Joined: August 15th, 2004, 10:02 pm
Location: north of south

Post by mnaz »

or mind noise..

finding the still point in that special chaos called "life"...
Post Reply

Return to “Poetry”