gorilla wake at brookline zoo

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gorilla wake at brookline zoo

Post by mindbum » January 16th, 2005, 5:25 am

gorilla wake at brookline zoo

the head lady gorilla
babs, matriarch
of the zoo tribe
was euthanised
with incurable kidneys.

keepers laid her out.
mother, daughters, sons and cousins,
caressed farewell.

the silverback, alone,
did not attend.
godless & songless, western man dances with the stuffed gorilla through all the blind alleys of a dead-end world.

-maxwell bodenheim

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Post by beat_fan » January 16th, 2005, 2:59 pm

This is interesting. You might want to re-consider the title, though; I thought it was going to be a comedic piece.

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Post by judih » January 16th, 2005, 3:14 pm

i love it
and loved the fact that the wake awoke within me after i read the poem


judih

perezoso

Post by perezoso » January 16th, 2005, 3:25 pm

I sorta dug it tho a bowerbrd pecking on Bab's stinking flesh might have improved it

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Post by e_dog » January 16th, 2005, 3:29 pm

i like this.

nice and subtle, no room for nor any need for birds picking stinking flesh.

maybe change title to

"a wake at brookline zoo"

or something.
I don't think 'Therefore, I am.' Therefore, I am.

perezoso

Post by perezoso » January 16th, 2005, 3:36 pm

subtle? I think not. It's better than most of the other squeaks on here---yet it's more 60's anthropomorphism 101

the world needs poets about as much as it needs astrologers--which is to say, it doesn't...and I suspect Marx & Lenin would agree

if you see Shakespeare (or, say, Updike or Bobby Dylan) on the street, mug him

:lol: :twisted: :P :twisted: :D :P :x :evil: :twisted:
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Post by judih » January 16th, 2005, 3:43 pm

no perezoso
shakespeare, he's in the alley

that's buddha on the road
& he warned us we'd have to kill him

perezoso

Post by perezoso » January 16th, 2005, 3:45 pm

Read some Shakespeare carefully and you discover he's just another sentimental Tory liberal--with superb rhetoric skills, though not so great in logic

As He tries to shoot the king, the Poet shoots himself in his foot

hester_prynne

Post by hester_prynne » January 16th, 2005, 4:32 pm

the buddha attended without really attending.


M.B., this beats going to church alright.
Nice one

H 8)

perezoso

Post by perezoso » January 16th, 2005, 4:39 pm

Hester in Sunday School? Yikes. Though you might get some decent investment tips there......

I tend to frequent Our Lady of Potassium Chlorate, but the sermons tend to be rather, uh, explosive...heh heh....The Right Reverend Ted Kaczynski presiding

hester_prynne

Post by hester_prynne » January 16th, 2005, 4:46 pm

Silverback Sunday School.

Studio eight sunday school.

Where Jane Austen mysteriously slips in and out from prison with bumper sticker slogan ideas.

Good Sunday Morning to you Pere.
Nice to see you.
H

perezoso

Post by perezoso » January 16th, 2005, 4:52 pm

You know that I have always admired your skill in bumper sticker writing, Hester! Bumper sticker writing ( also known as modern poetry) comes in handy when people can't put together any creative ideas or find some evidence for their belief systems .....

hester_prynne

Post by hester_prynne » January 16th, 2005, 5:00 pm

belief relief,
oh lordy,
i'm runnin shorty
on belief relief.

Whirled peas,
visualize ballard,
honk
if you believe
in jesus,
horn broken
watch for finger,
she who laughs, lasts,
real men
don't do violence,
caution:
driver singing,
bumpersticker
scat

perezoso

Post by perezoso » January 16th, 2005, 5:11 pm

"America: Love it or Fly a 707 into it"

"Crack Powered!"

"Caution: Armed and Dangerous Psychotic at Wheel"

Gods, Guts, and Morning Glory seeds

"This Car stops at Northern Mexican Bordelloes"

"Stoned Samaritan"

"Real Men Fuck Jesus"

"Think orally, act anally"

"Don't blame me, I voted for Zippy"

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Post by Axanderdeath » January 16th, 2005, 5:38 pm

The line that worries me is
love america or fly a 707 in to it. I don't think the divsion is that clear, but i think it was sarcasim?

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